Okay, interesting premise here. A Chinese knight and female crusader. Seems like an interesting historical fantasy/alt. history. One idea might be the parallel story of a Muslim party who ends up fighting the Christian crusaders.

Haha... darn dresses. Good for nothing, I say.Eew... sea sickness. Only one thing, last sentence, second sentence- 'beyondit' I think should be two words.Otherwise, well done! Keep writing!~Ponteh out.

Oh nice.Well, this one is starting out great. Can't wait to see the next chapter!Great intro, keep up the good work!~Ponteh

wonderful story. short, but no less enjoyable. i like how it moves quickly, it takes less time to read a great story :) please update soon, ur writing style is best described as enchanting and ur story is great. :) can't wait to read more :D

Oh, me gusta! Please update soon!

Thanks for telling me what an obi was. Poor Liam, he's getting sea sick. AW. Short, but still good. Love it, update!

Good, but one thing. I don't know what England and France's relations were like during the Crusades, or the geography and routes to Israel, but would/could they pass through France to get there?

Techy El Nerd

Oh cool! Thanks for clueing me in :P (I have author alert on you, but for some reason I wasn't alerted *sigh*) I look very much forward to this.Well, on to chappie one!~Ponteh

Much better than the orignal. Tighter narrative, better editting, and a lot more realism.

~He Who Walks On All Fours

I love this. Can't wait for more, so hurry up and update because I am growing impatient. Oh, and what's an obi? Maybe I should just look it up, anyway, update!

Good, right more. Unfortunately short.

Walker

Much better beginning than in the original. The intro is good and it makes a lot more sense.

I would beg of you, however to use some of my characters as they would fit, particularly Walker.

Techy El Nerd

I haven't read the first version of this story, but I really like this update. I've been interested in the Crusades since I did a history project on them five years ago. I love this so far, so update, please!