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| Superflea 2005-06-05 ch 1,  | abuseWow I loved it. This is the society and world that our people live in today. This is awesome, keep it up! :) -Fe |
| alto-sweetie 2005-05-25 ch 1, | abuseI really liked it. It makes me think of, well, just everybody around us. Thankyou. |
| Prevaricate 2005-05-25 ch 1, | abuseFirst, so I don't forget- a few grammar/spelling errors. "Lost ion forever" towards the end, and "most are hero's" should be "most are heroes"... "wandering if someone is really listening" should being with "wondering". Now, the poem itself.. Damn, that's a good idea. -laughs- I want to steal the beginning... Amazingly original idea, with the repitition of "LOST:". I love the beginning. The end is good, too, but the beginning it my favorite part. "Unaware of the dog eat dog world." That is such a good line.. Wow. I like this. A /lot/. Lol. Prev' |