 Jeide 2005-05-26 . chapter 1 The beginning of the poem didn't seem right somewhere... But like a song, it was picked up and lifted in the end. |
 Meghan 2005-05-25 . chapter 1 "While the shadow of guilt falls one by one,The spiritus sancti is with but none"I really like this line. I'm not really sure why, but it seems to flow naturally. Of the three peoms I liked this one best, but some pasts still felt a little strained, as if you knew what you wanted to say but could put it in a way that rhymed."And the Stranger knew in hearts of true,That only danger could lie aheadWhen the rider in white so boldly cameTo off his head and in good had claimed"This part kind of felt like that... The beginning of the poem was strong, though. The end seemed forced.Good job, though. Orgy's still my favorite, but I liked this one a lot. |
 Brandon Jeffery 2005-05-25 . chapter 1And through the darkness comes the eternal Horizon of light, for the wanderer is no more, for he burns with Hatred, and Destruction, Chaos, and Sin, burn beside his dark ways, for he shall never return. |
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