Great start. Loved the line "Teenagers would either run off to fun in the sun or scorch their brains with SAT 2400" So very true ^_^

Can't wait to see what happens next.

hahahahahha! That is so like our orchestra! Mr. F, and Shelley! Yehhehehe! :):):):):):):):)yeah, the story is great, but um... some of the words are used wrong. Anyway, keep up the good work! I wonder where this is going! Post Post Post, my dear! mucho love.

Lovely writing style. I liked the flashing neon sign, that was a nice touch. I hope you keep writing this one, it definitely has promise. Woo! =)