Very nicely done...I could sense the whole thing just through these lines. It seems that a whole new story's unfolding. Good job.

I like the way you present this poem, the words should speak louder than anything else, because everytime else is mearly distraction. Good poem, short but gives enough.

Some how, that managed to envoke some thought from me and I don't know why. Such simple words that were just so strong...I liked it.

By the way, do you know of any good publishers? I want to try to get my poetry publushed...But I don't even know where to begin!

cool, simple, i like

=) smilingface