Very nice. Though I think that the first four lines alone could stand as their own poem. You think? But as it is, awesome job, as usual. Great images, fantastic verb use... Overall a wonderful poem. Keep writing! :)

woah i love this.the emotion in your work is beautifulyoure very talented

I LOVE THIS POEM. it's fucking... fucking... AMAZING... :|

wow... way to paint a picture!

nicotine patches, eh? ...hmm, interesting... i really like this poem. nice job!!

portrait of an american teen; sex, love, alcohol... tragic, wonderful.

Beautiful. I love the imagery and the cut off way it ended. Sharp. So well done.

interesting, to say the least(!) it tells such a twisted tale and i love that.

I may not review you much, but I still want to let you know that I consider you one of the best (if not the best) authors at this site. I don't know if that means much, but it is the highest compliment I can offer. Every time I click on any of your pieces, it stuns me how fucking brilliant they are; and each one is amazing in it's own unique way.

"in the laps of starry-eyed virgins"

thats a great line.i had to read this a few times to get it, but i really like it.good job with this

I just got a little curious-- and went to go read this poem!

It's amazing. I'll read more of these poems tomorrow and give more adequate reviews. I just wanted to say that I was really blown away by this-- maybe it's my mood. Tomorrow! ONWARD!

lovely. i love the last lines. actually i love all of it.lol..:)

oh my...this is wonderful...i don't know where you got this idea but...wow. it's perfect. keep writing.

original, beautiful, wonderfully weird and one of the best things I've read in ages.

beautifully melancholy. i love love loved it.

sounds like a sudden dive into somebody's subconcious. love the starry eyed virgins fluttering like butterflies.