I loved it. I don't see anything wrong, and its definitely a style you could use a lot. It had great meaning, its very easy to understand. It doesn't use harsh or complicated words, and it doesn't look like you're trying to fit the dictionary into a single poem. I love this. 10 on all sides.

Very good and i'm thanking my best friends for showing me it cause it is brillinat XBethX

that is wounder full.

First of all your poem was pretty. It flowed elegantly and was very surreal. Definitly a great read. The contrasting colors were a nice touch.

Second, I would like to thank you for reviewing my story "Experimental Chaos." If you are still interested in reading it I have updated and revised the story, taking your advice to mind.

Hey, I'm half (at least, my dad was born and semi-raised in the Philipenes. Oh and I can't spell Philipenes or Filipino for my life, so just ignore the bad spelling) Filipino...so I think that's cool.

Anyway, about the poem itself, it's wonderful. Most poetry these days are so agnst ridden it's hard to find a decent poem. So, great job. There was like one like that didn't fit rhythm wise, but if you read it wierdly it fits.

And you told me to review Lunar Chaos, and I'm debating it. I started reading it, but I don't know if I'm gonna get past the first chapter tonight. I'm not in the story reading mood. But I'll read through it eventually.

The colours you used for different emotions were chosen well. The only thing I could think to improve upon is the rhythm of your words. (The rhythm wasn't bad at all, but it could be approved upon in places.) I enjoyed the rhyming; it wasn't forced, and sounded natural.

P.S. Thank you for reviewing my story, I appreciated your comments.

Such a pretty poem! You're good at writing these, obviously.

Very cool and wholesome. It was really fun to read this. Good use of the metaphor.

P.S.: Can't read any of your stories right now, maybe some other time.

Good you should think about a job, then again i have no idea what i'm talking about not now not ever

I like the way you used different color to describe life. I can't believe you write this poem while watching TV. Haha =)

beautiful

hey! I'm Filipina too!

ooh, love the poem. one thing though...it was kind of sad that the whole canvas was filled already. life isn't over yet you know. lol. anyways that's just my oppinion. happy writing. P.S. when are you going to update lunar chaos? hn? school is hard i know but try to update soon kay? *sniff*

aw... must be great to have such an interest in the arts^^ Great poem expressing yourself~

keep writing!

YO,YO,YO..im feeling SEXY..(now, im sure u know who I am..:))I LOVE IT! i can really relate! you really captivated me!! i love your poems!!i love this one alot!i love it!!BWAHAHAHAHA!dont stop writing...or i'll kick your chair..:))

wow! this was quite an amazing poem! the rhymes seemed so at ease, unlike some people's who just clash together rather horribly. the flow of this was excellent too! i enjoyed it! nice work!

~tuesday