I love the way the way you moved this from line to line, and the last stanza is brilliant.

I have totally felt that way a million times. The way you wrote it and described it was just wonderful. Although, it would have been nice if it was a little longer and you added a bit more about the hypocrisy and religion. But other than that... good job! Keep writing!

oh been there done that you know the whole hangover thing at church it was hell. anyway i liked this poem but it seem to me that it is too bunched up it kinda feels all pushed together in the format it is in other then that it is great my favorite line is "It's too late and I regret" its how i sometimes feel. by the way if you drink and don't want a hangover the next day just drink a lot of water right after for every drink and just a little more will help prevent a hangover just a tip you might already know.

O.o I am speechless...once again. Simply incredible. The line structuring was perfect. But man...your words. So powerful. So down-to-earth and overwhelming. Okay, granted, I'm Christian and very much devoted to God, but even so, this piece is awesome. Very cynical. Done to perfection.

btw, thanks for putting me onto your fav list. It's the greatest honor.

'censored prose'.

So lovely, I like how it explores what really goes on rather than the standard church day, etc.

Thank you for your kind comment. I will continue, just for you. :) Youre too kind.

hmm...interesting, although i am a christian and do not have empty eyes or pay any attention to censored things (if you haven't noticed, the bible isn't really censored either...amazed they let children read it...)

good. the line structure is odd, but not that bad. i liked the last stanza the most, it was rather powerful. good job.