Wow, this is amazing, great work!!

oh, sad...

so sad... and well writte.. weve all felt that way

i love the way you wrote it. fantastic job! i really enjoyed it.

SP

Hmm...interesting; not so sure about the ending though. Run spellchecker, however, and fix the capitalization; that'll help a bit. Good job; I like this overall.

two things here- 1) using "twas" takes away from the seriousness of your poem with such a quaint term. 2) the last line "I'll be ready to die over you" I don't think 'over' is the word you want, unless you want that specific word usage to jump out at the reader. in any case, I like it-the emotion is strong and I was sucked in. keep writing!