Hey I love your story (I no im starting to overuse this statement but I mean it). Its sweet, funny, exciting, interesting, bit of dramatic all mixed into one. Please update. You'll be all doing us (and yourself cos you know you dont wanna not update)a big favour if you do so. Update! Tehehe:P

I liked that :)I'm feeling too tired and retarded to make a decent comment, sorry. I'll see what I can do another time.

it's nice, this one. good young adult fiction. I'm not really much into the YA audience at all, so that's what I mean when I say not my cup of tea. it's coming along nicely.

this chapter was cute. I liked this one a lot.

this story has a lot of potential, you know. but this all feels. I dunno. incomplete, I guess. you describe things so beautifully and have the most descriptive style, and the characters are slowly starting to grow on me. but it still can't escape feeling trite.

but I love the humor in it. I really love that. this chapter seems to show things starting to get interesting.

there really is the potential here. I love your poems, don't get me wrong, I think you're talented and everything, but so far I have no attachment to these characters whatsoever. it seems a little- eh- for me. I'll continue reading. I don't mean to be so critical, I'm sure this is an excellent story, it's just not my cup of tea.

with your request, I decided to read this. I usually don't like to read stories with multiple chapters. regardless, I was enchanted by your abilities in prose, and it seems fascinating, if a bit trite.

'How and I still' - 'am I still' not 'and'?

'But at the moment I will pretend not to care, because I’m going to sleep now.' Nice line.

Maybe he doesn’t think I’m an idiot after all... I'm so proud of you! Really, though it was a rare show of optimism, you were absolutely right. I never felt that way about you. I love you... so much.Great story!Bravo, BRAVO, BRAVO! BRAVISSIMA!

its really good, and i like the way you managed to make it all fit in 24 hours. i do have one question, though. what's the '2' at the bottom of chapter 7 for?

Little did we know how wrong all of that was haha.

I'm lovin' it. Just one thing, try spell check in some spots. BUT I LOVE IT ANYWAY!

OMG I'm so happy you're finally putting this up!

I truly can't understand why people haven't been reviewing. This is better than nearly all the stories I've read on this site, and believe me, I'm a tough critic. Great spelling, grammar, plot, everything is fabulous. I hope you get a lot of reviews for this, lord knows you deserve them. Keep up the great work!