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| AngelicSunshineNOT 2007-04-04 ch 1, anon. | abuseThis is really good so far! It's really nicely written, and I like Kylie's comments to herself. Hehe. XD |
| dOrKy-GuRl03 2005-05-30 ch 1,  | abusehey that was a really nice start...post more soon...so loving it...getting very interesting... |
| Slowly Sinking 2005-05-30 ch 1, | abuseNah, it'd have to be really, really, really - so much worse than this for me to think of flaming. I like it, you capute the emotions of your characters well, like the detail about the single tear messing up Kylie's nail, and the repetition of 'I wish' at the end is really powerful. Maybe I think you overused the capitals a bit, they just seem a bit melodramatic by the end and don't have such a strong impact, but that's just me. Looking out for the next part. L |