it's prettyful, but what were you on when you wrote this?kidding...but i like your imagery and the language you use (espacially "blind me with bliss./or anything sharp."). you develop your thoughts well, but you kind of trail off sometimes... all around, good.

I like it a lot. it is really passionate and eloquent. it wasnt just words for me, it was feelings and powerful imagery. :) I dont think there is much to critisize, just the spacing was awkward once or twice, but it was never enough that I was bothered by it. :D it was very good.

it was really intresting i liked it alot