m...that's good italian sonnet... though the lack of capitalization and some punctuation is rather offputting...

Thus spake A.R.B.

I love this poem! Well written..and well done.

xo

It's generally a good theme to write about, and you have the rhyme, but they don't always work so well. Furthermore the poem has no rhythm, which took out a lot of score.

Another minor problem is that you did not use punctuations at the end of the lines when needed to be, nor capital letters at the beginning.