Wow. It sounds like it's about a woman regretting she had an abortion to please a man. But that's just me.

I really like the first line of this, and I like the chorus-y thing in italics. This is my favourite (so far) of the poems I've read of yours. It has a lot of original imagery and wordplay... I like it a lot. :)

I think you forgot a space - "Beneathtruth's light"

This is a really good poem. I think in a way a lot of people can relate to the various sentiments expressed, just because I think a lot of people give up so much of themselves in an attempt to gain love. It's good. :)

-Jesse
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Love this poem! It's very well written and I can almost hear it as a song, it would make wonderful lyrics.

Very well done. I think it could be a song with a little revision ... that's about it. Keep it up.

This was very well written very emtionalI really liked this...great job! I hopeyou write more poems.

Curse poems that evoke such emotions! Haha, seriously though, what a beauty. I love this poem; eloquence can only begin to describe its meaning. I guess it really hurts to read this, in all honesty; I let someone take something from me I should have never given, but it's out of my hands now - you're right. By the way... you're a big fan of the word "pine" as a verb, aren't you? ;P Keep it up.

Yeah, love sucks some of the time...actually most of the time(at least for me!) FYI: a tanka is like an extended haiku with a 5-7-5-7-7 format.

Aw, that's sad, but beautifully written right to the end.