hei vulpine...hora..hora...you can see me in gempakstarz forum..
damn the mis spelling...who cares that minor mistake..
i think this story is the best angst genre...full of emotional relese...
gambatte kudasai^_^

pretty much straight to the point and not much fuss.

There were some obvious misspellings...unless you actually meant it to be written that way.

However...I'll just say you should re-read you're story to check for mistakes like that.

Nice story, but I thought the ending's kind of... I don't know, off. Uhm, don't ask me what that means. I just think the last sentence kind of don't fit in.

great plotline, but it needs much more detail with less dialogue. i think that the scene is over way too quickly; we didn't even know White, Grey or Black before this. You could make a sort of prologue just to explain what happened before this whole schpeal... i dunno -- it's good how it is ^_~

~Max W.~