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| marti10 2006-07-31 ch 7,  | abuseWHOA! ANNABELLE is destined to save the people. Nice work! I'm waiting for more. |
| marti10 2006-07-31 ch 3, | abuseI love that phrase "Follow suit". LOL. Like it. How old is Annabelle? |
| marti10 2006-07-31 ch 2, | abuseLove it. I just want to know a little more on Annabelle. But I really do like it. |
| marti10 2006-07-31 ch 1, | abuseSuspence. I have to keep on reading! |
| Celeste Se'oir 2006-06-24 ch 7, | abuseSo the truth is out, hm, now what will she do with it? well, I shall see how you plan on bringing this story around. Though I suggest making a few mior adjustments to the first couple chapters. Later,~Ffuffy~ |
| Celeste Se'oir 2006-06-24 ch 5, | abuseThis one was much batter, short, but it had some detail and there weren't so many odd things jumping in. Though the fact that you had Annabelle hit in the head again so soon is a little repetative. Maye have the other elf magically put her to sleep? Just a suggestion. Later,~Ffuffy~ |
| Celeste Se'oir 2006-06-24 ch 4, | abuse*twitch* "the vilest, evilest creatures that had ever existed"? Um...that's a little...corny and very undescriptive... mew, this chapter needs more work, the begining has no transition from where they left the town to when they were attacked either...I hope the next chapter will be better. Later,~Ffuffy~ |
| Celeste Se'oir 2006-06-24 ch 3, | abuseThis one was alright...but it was kinda annoying when you finially gave te guy a name then you miss spell it twice >.> Later,~Ffuffy~ |
| Celeste Se'oir 2006-06-24 ch 2, | abuse...ah, looks a little... vague...you need to work on your descriptions a little more...but the plot is intriguing. Later,~Ffuffy~ |
| Celeste Se'oir 2006-06-24 ch 1, | abuseIt's a little choppy and rushed, but it is a very mysterious start, which is good. ;P keep the reader guessing I say. Later,~Ffuffy~ |
| Kaileyfish 2006-06-19 ch 7, | abuseWOOHOO! This story is really great! Most of the time when I start a story, I just read the first couple of chapters, but this story completely drew me in! You are a superb storyteller! Please continue! ~Kaileyfish |
| Jodie Sinclair 2006-06-18 ch 7, | abusehmm where have i seen a plot like this before?? lol |
| Jodie Sinclair 2005-07-20 ch 6, | abusethere are some parts that need fixed like when she picked up her arrow and it says before hand that she couldnt find it. but im glad you finnaly updated it! keep it up!~Timon |
| LOTRMS 2005-06-24 ch 5, | abuseYou have a good story started here. Usually I don't read the long stories but I made an exception for this one after I read the first chapter. You are a good writter, I hope you keep it up! *As a side note, I love the name 'Annabelle.' |
| Jodie Sinclair 2005-06-21 ch 5, | abuseMrs Sequoia! You need to update this sotry pronto! I lovedit you need to write! Heck with 4-H write girl write! LOLlove ya and your story,~Timon |