the last stnaza is really nice...although there is something that i don't get...there seems to be a quite of a contradiction between the first parts of the poem and the later parts...in the first part, you seem to make the reader feel as if this is his last day and he should make the most of it while in the last stanza, you seem to make the readers feel like he should just go with a happy-go-luck like lifestyle...you should quite justtify that i guess...

truly yours...

Ooh, look who's back on FP after a VERY long time! :) Welcome back! *hugs* I really liked this one - hopeful and well-written. Nice job!

thats nice too. a very unique look at such an overused topic ;)

Beautiful! Sorry my reviews are getting really boring now but I am really enjoying your work!

I love the third stanze again. This poem is quite different from your other work though. I like it! Beautiful poem!

Much love, Rosanna.

Wonderful poem-starts off very cynical and sad, but the end seems hopeful.