First off, DDR rules! My sister has two dance pads and all three of the games that were released for the PS2 (DDR MAX, DDR MAX2 & DDR: Extreme). Really odd point? I can't dance worth a damn, but I totally rock at DDR! Strange, huh? Hyped for 'Naruto' to...'Toonami' and 'Adult Swim', what would I do without them (probably have a girlfirend and a life...LOL!)? Anyways, onto your story Yinny. Like many of your works, I found myself confused by it intitially, but grew to love it the more I got into it. Hm, Otougawa Kuzume and Hyyakazi Yumi...team up potential? I wonder... Well, back to the review. My first piece of advice to you, slow down some. Everything about this fic screams out 'rushed' to me. Missing punctuation in some parts, spelling errors, grammar issues, there's a lot of mistakes to be found in this chapter. You definitely need to go over it again with a fine toothed comb and clear the bugs out of it. I mean, I like the story and the characters (especially the goofy girls of the 'Butterfly Triad'...cool ** name!), but if you don't take care of the little spelling and grammar mistakes; they'll kill your story befor eit can even get started. Please take another, much closer inspection of 'BLEACHed' and fix those problems. It'd be a shame to let something like that destroy an otherwise exellent story. Well, I'm off to review 'swordsGIRL HiToMi'! Remember what I said, though...

Terryll Preston, still2twisted of FictionPress fame...

Nice work! Sweet Action, lets me see the fight. Lolz. DDR Kickz ** too, never seen Naruto. The writing itself is good with a bit of spelling errors, but hell. I have plenty of them. Lolz. Looking forward to more. Lolz!