Really interesting! I like this, though I'm not normally on here. I only have a single poem out. As you can probably tell, I like fanfiction better. Anyways, I'm still waiting for your update. :evil smile:

This looks interesting so far. A great start. The only thing I'd say is put in a little more description to add atmosphere as the majority of this is speech.

I really like this so far. And I like the fact that all the people in this story sound so...not like the people in my school, thank God. I love it, keep writing, cuz I wanna see how AJ gets through heartbreak. Javier is such a hot name...

O, I'm excited already.