Wow! You were always a marvelous writer, but your style has evolved even more so. I adore this piece, it's nothing short of miraculous.

(BTW, I'm terribly sorry for the delay in reviews... so much crap has been going on that I didn't have the time. But I'm trying to make up for it now).

hey darling. I am so sorry for not keeping up to date and not being around. Happy belated birthday. I am furious with myself for missing it.

this is so painful, and so beautiful at the same time. But I still wish that you didn't have to write it. The language is lovely though. It's a great piece.

Great use of metaphor. I think you're realy growing as a writer which is wonderfull. But you should really stop being so ** your self. Anyway another brilliant piece and keep writing. oh and happy belated birthday. you're a gemini and thats so cool hah sorry i just find that cool.

Other than the fact that your angry, I really have no idea what that was about. Sorry.

well, happy birthday! though I'm thinking that's not the response you wanted.

I like this... the metaphors are lovely, but not too gruesome... beautiful. :-)

This is really beautiful. I love the end, you opened it well too though. Happy 18th...i know i've had some ** birthdays, they can rub alot in your face. Make you realize how your whole life has left you, or how you missed out on things. That's what happens to me at least...I'll be 14 soon, it feels like I've missed out on alot...*shrugs*

I hope you're doing alright.

ANNA

Aww, I like this one and I can really relate. This poem is really amazing, it has wonderful imagery and the word choice is very nice!

Interesting...Not bad...It's, well, interesting. Some of the lines don't seem to fit, the poem seems to change throughout, but I know how that can be. Happy belated 18th!

Sometimes it seems merely living is the greatest chore of all. I love this anguish expressed so colorfully here. Great work.

I liked the 18 part. I hope your birthday got better.

omfg you posted *stares blankly* **.. lol YEAY! anyhoo, as you said not a best but its still good. especially since your writings are so sporatic. nicely put.

Thius is really good. Nice words. Lol.