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| summerbee 2007-01-10 ch 1,   | I like this. It's pretty interesting. One of those Computers Class horror-stories put in fiction form. The only thing that bothered me was how outrageously proper some of the people were. Sure, it's feasible, but most people don't really bother to have TOTALLY perfect grammar- I mean, most people don't even do that in real life xD Such as this: "It astounds me that parents leave their kids unsupervised on the ‘Net when there are so many horror stories about predators stalking children. Bet most parents would ban their kids from chat rooms if they knew the kind of language they were using, too." Or this: "Usually someone who comes in for the express purpose of annoying the chatters in the room. They tend to be in the young to mid-teenage range with zero social, spelling and grammar skills. I like to mess with their minds when they cop all that stupid ‘Net-speak’ lingo." And also, Candy didn't really give enough information for the 'MadChatter' to find her, I don't think, but he could have found it with alternative sources like her blogs or something. Otherwise, very nice! Suspenseful, chilling, not to mention a REALLY good ending- I like the way the bot kicks him off, like everything is just usual and he isn't a murderer. Great job! |
| Seisaset 2006-03-26 ch 1, | wow, that is creepy. *shivers* |
| Kendra E Cameron 2005-10-15 ch 1, | Gosh. That was creppy. really good, but creppy. Well done! |
| idontgetit91 2005-07-14 ch 1, | Wow. I kind of figured that was gonna happen, but the way you wrote it made it really good. Job well done. |
| reasonablysunny 2005-06-06 ch 1, | I like this one, but I think you could have done better to highten the suspense a little. I mean, you never really gave any evidence that Mind was dead other than what Mad said. Otherwise, pretty cool. Good portrayal of a real chat room and a real troll (only real trolls don't ordinarily kill people--I hope). |
| CeeKay Sheppard 2005-06-05 ch 1, | Holy God, now I'm really scared. That was terrifyingly realistic . . . actually, it was just plain terrifying. Excellent story. |
| UnhappyPeople 2005-06-05 ch 1, | Ha, that was brilliant! I'm adding it to my favorites right now. I love how you told the whole story through dialogue. The ending was somehow creepy and funny at the same time. Now I have yet another reason to stay away from those annoying trolls ... |
| Princess-anna57 2005-06-05 ch 1, | LOL! That was so great! ^_^ Cool! Write on! ~Anna~ |
| Bitch Du Jour 2005-06-05 ch 1, | Oh my god~!! Is there going to be a sequel? O_o;; And of course, this reminds me of the movie Stangeland. Very very interesting! I like it, freaky, neat, very "hip" and present-day. |
| Demented Authoress 2005-06-05 ch 1, | Wow. That was really something. I... have nothing else to say, except that at midnight, that was awfully scary, especially since I'm insanely paranoid. It was awesome. ^^ |