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angel 2007-07-19 ch 1, anon.	abusea little long, but not a total waste of time...a waste of time...but not a total
Werecat99 2006-01-29 ch 1,	abuseA good take on an old tale. Being Greek, I could not resist reading this, especially since I found out who the story is about. :) Good work on character development and setting. I got a clear, vivid impression of the tomb they were in, and thank you a million times for treating my native mythology with respect. And good job in showing, not telling the action. A few nitpicks: "His pale features paused a moment on the door to the tomb". Technically, it would not be his features, but his gaze, methinks. In the same paragraph as above, you used "a moment" very close together. Perhaps deleting one of the two? "including Thanatos, Death, for those who cared to look" In that sentence, "death" should be between dashes and not commas, methinks. It would look better this way. Try it and see for yourself. There were a few more minor issues like these throughout the story, but nothing of real importance. Happy writing!
Shadowhound 2005-12-12 ch 1,	abusenot cool. no way anyone can beat Death! granted, Thor can withstand Old Age, but no one can beat Death, even if Death wants to be defeated!okay, the story was cool, and you did a good job with the wrestling match, but i still don't like that Death lost!god, that bugs me! p.s.ever heard of Piers Anthony? he wrote a book called On A Pale Horse about the incarnation of Death. basically, a guy becomes Thanatos and has to accept the role he has been chosen to play. it is really good, and i recommend you read it.
likethemovies 2005-06-22 ch 1,	abuseM, I liked it! I love reading well-written/researched myhtology or historical fiction, because it's like putting together a puzzle. You get to see how many pieces are in the wrong place, or missing. But you, my dear, have a nicely completed puzzle. Liscence permitted!
Pico the Great 2005-06-21 ch 1,	abuseThis was very, very well-written. The characters are very understandable with no extraneous description, and I liked the dialogue. Great job. Very much enjoyed readng this. Ta! -PTG
LordK 2005-06-07 ch 1,	abuseThat was so clever! I loved the ending. It wasn't a gigantic surprise by any means, but it was just SO well written. It was obvious you have a complete understanding of these characters. I felt almost like I knew them in just this short story. Very good, very interesting, very exciting and written with absolutely brilliant form. I loved it.

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