I like it. You use a little too many exclamation points, so it's just the same thing as a period, no different. At least that's what it seems like. If you reserve it for when you actually need it, it'll pack more punch when you do use it. Other than that, I love this story. Great job!

Awesome. I love it. Great description, and lots of creative... stuff.

But... like all good stories... it IS flawed. Some of the description is very... uh... awkward. Like the whole breasts thing. I mean, yeah, they change when she transforms but you don't have to describe it in such detail. So you might want to edit it a little especially in the words you choose for description. Then it'll be almost perfect.

YAY! You may remember me. I've reviewed your Yu-Gi-Oh story, "Reuniting Darkness with Light".

Good story so far. When you get the chance, read and review my own Magical Girl story. ^_^

Wow, this seems really interesting. I like it! Please update. And to let you know, I updated MY story if you haven't known already.^-^