it sounds like there should be a lot more to this story. will there be a sequel? if there is then plz update soon!

That was a little but saddening story. And I enjoyed it.

You updated! Whoo-hoo. As usual, I loved it. Your writing style is beautiful and I would love to see more.

~Hunter of Lost Souls~

"It was too bad that Aris wasn’t in the right state of mind to be thankful that Eddie wasn’t a homosexual pervert who raped dead people." :D How enlightening.This was an interesting chapter, but I hoped it to be a little longer. Maybe next time, no?Keep up the good work.

Update soon please! I think I've become a fan! ^ ^; Well, I can't wait for the next chapters! Update soon!

Well isn't this something. My sister recommended this to me when I said I'd like to read some wampire stuff.And to be honest with you... I love this story.The characters are well done so far, and I hope to see what they will become in the future. (Y'know, how entwined they will become and what will be the cause of it all.)The plot is interesting in a wicked way. Please continue! :)

Once again, a good chapter! Very well-written. I'm sure you have a steady idea of what you're doing for this story that hasn't been revealed to us yet but I'm looking forward to seeing it!

Still, I only see the GOOD (Aris) and the BAD (Eddie) aspects of the story but never any flaws with Aris except that he just got...captured and nothing good at all about Eddie here.

See, I don't even really like Eddie at all. He's a bastard, am I right? Am I suppose to hate him? I think so. But even then, there are likable traits in people.

Uh, take...Reservoir Dogs for example. A movie about a bunch of thiefs and killers. We shouldn't LIKE the robbers, the murders, the bad guys because they're the bad guys but we DO. We actually CARE for them because they have GOOD qualities. Yes, they SHOOT at people and we see them kill but we still like the characters because they're funny or they're looking out for someone in the group or something like that. We might not like everyone from the movie, but we admit we like a lot of them.

Likewise, I don't even really like Aris. I'm sure he's a good vampire. I'm sure he's all right, but what flaws does he have? He got caught. Okay, I see that. But what else? Same thing with Reservoir Dogs. There was a good guy in the movie but he did some bastardly things, too. We liked him for that because he wasn't all good because nobody is all good. I don't want to assume that Aris is just some perfect Gary-Stu, that the world is all that evil. I mean, being a vampire is the only flaw?

I'm not saying this is bad. Not at all. I'm just telling you how to improve in character development. To me, a character is much more important than a story and you have the story down to greatness. You just need to develop the characters a bit more so I give a ** what happens to either of them.

Well this was different.Never ever before have I been reading a story where the wampire is the victim. Or is he?Anyways, this was refreshing. As I finished reading this, I noticed I wanted to read more.The story is somewhat original and the writing style very enjoyable.

What an enjoyable read! I'll be glad to review such work. The dialogue is well-done and it's not as stale as most vampirical stories can be sometimes. The story moves, which is nice; not too slow, not too fast.

My only complaint is Aris and the human, the two characters. They're not bad at all! They're wonderfully done and you certainly hit the bad vs. good aspect but they could be developed more.

Since you are continuing this story, perhaps it's unfair of me to say this, so bear with me, but for the next section, consider showing MORE personality traits with both the human and Aris. We as humans (and I suppose vampires, since they're similar to humans in some ways xD) are not all BAD or all GOOD. Why is Aris in this state? Why is the human so bad? Aris cannot be too perfect as the human cannot be completely evil.

I'm sure if you continue, these answers I questioned will be revealed. Keep trying, though, and never get discouraged.