Beautifully conveys the message. (Nice title by the way.) The last line hits like a punch in the gut after reading the lines above.

lovely (yet tragic) description of the - erhm, shall we say "leap" - into adulthood. is there no inbetween anymore? great portrayal.

-salt.

interesting ending

A pleasing, sensual image, brief but lingering.

oh, what a perfect illustration of that tenuous transition from girl to almost-woman. simply amazing.

i love it! one of my favorites for sure, it has this special tone to it, and it's just amazing!

Wonderfully sad. Shimmyshimmy on.

thank you, yes I fixed the mistake and I'm glad you reminded me. ; that was embarressing. XDD I really love this, lovely lovely sentences and breath taking word use. again amazing and well done! _ I love it!

!* noelle *!

ah, the loss of innocence portrayed very well.

kudos.

that's exactly how it feels to be at that part in life. cool