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EveryNowAndThen 7/14/05 . chapter 1I'm delighted to see that you're back! You haven't lost any talent. :) |
Suicidal Skies 6/22/05 . chapter 1Lovely. Just lovely |
Cyssel 6/14/05 . chapter 1wonderful piece here. love the imagery. and accidental rhymes sometimes make the poem even more beautiful. |
Nobody-n-Particular 6/8/05 . chapter 1Shudderings of feelings that capture and entice. I will look forward to reading more of your poetry, but alas no time at the moment. |
Raven Oghma 6/8/05 . chapter 1I love the slashes that seem to denote insecurity in the speaker's voice. The emotion is conveyed effectively, but a few of the rhymes almost sound forced. Sometimes it can be better not to rhyme, too! Good job, and thank you for reviewing me! -Raven Oghma |
Captain Blunderbuss 6/8/05 . chapter 1Ahh, been there. (Still there) Very nice. I like how you get your point across, yet keep a mild ambiguity. I haven't decided whether or not I like the word/other/word thingie. I know where you're coming from though. Knowing the basic feeling, yet the indesicion of which. I'd watch it though, on the one that "lust/love/longful"-love and lust are very different things. I think that you may mean to use both of them. Hmm. Very nice though. Just a thought (question), is there a significance to your lack of capitalization? Anyhoo, check some more of my stuff out, and I'll do the same! |
youzi 6/8/05 . chapter 1it isn't always a must to rhyme. But i appreciated your efforts to. Do keep writing D |
Strangerwithnoface 6/6/05 . chapter 1Interesting take to this piece. I really enojyed it... especailly the / / / part. Take care Vlad |