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| i-rite-gud 2005-06-23 ch 1,   | That made me cry. I have tears rolling down my cheeks right now. That was a beautiful sad poem. |
| misery re 2005-06-21 ch 1, | Lovely poem. There was one line that distracted me making me read it a couple times: "And watch the stars be born as I watch." You stated twice in this line about watching the stars. I hope you understand what I'm trying to say. This poem is wonderful. Love the use of the sun. |
| The Mujah 2005-06-13 ch 1, | Loneliness is a tough one, no?Even stronger than the last one, although the ending could use a little bit of work in terms of flow and termination. |
| queenofthbritons 2005-06-10 ch 1, | how true considering that our first instinct is to try and escape ssomething that threatens us. good work here. I like how you work the sun into it alot. nicely done. |
| method acting 2005-06-09 ch 1, | very touching. I love the ending and I can really relate to the topic. I think everyone can. I love the last eight lines, really brings it all together. Nice job. |
| WiltingBlackRose 2005-06-07 ch 1, | This is really good...All of your poems always hit a spot in my heart...they make me want to cry...That takes a lot too...Good job on this poem. |
| Sorrowful Dreams 2005-06-07 ch 1, | this is really good. Deep and touching. I love the way it is written and emotions ~Sorrow~ |