I love your story! when will there be more?

Oh no! Saxons! I adore that you've put Saxons in this: too few authors make use of the historical background, which is a pity.
And have I mentioned how much I love Yvain? For years, I really didn't like the character (not yours, but the ledgendary one), but you'll be pleased to know that you have changed my point of view! Unfortunately, this now means that whenever I read something else with Yvain (or Owain or Euain or whatever he happens to be called) in, I'm always hugely dissapointed. But you can take that as a compliment!
And still on compliments, respect is in order for the fact that you can change and play around with what is usually accepted in the legends without making me cringe. Quite the opposite, in fact: I always really want to know what new twist you're going to introduce next!
I'd say 'keep up the good work', but I know you will anyway!

What marvellously large chapters. I feel quite daunted.

I enjoyed the first chapter, and will look to ploughing through the rest at some stage. The premise certainly has me intrigued, I'll grant you that.

Well done on an enjoyable opening. I trust the rest follows in the same vein. Happy writing.

Um, OK, so in the last review I just posted I thought this was finished, and I just went back to read the AN at the end, and it turns out it's not finished *blushes*. Well, I can't complain! It means we get more story! {transfer all sqeeness fron previous review, and add more because it's not all done!} This story is just fantastic!

...
*squees silently*
Wow. It's somewhat of a shock that it's finished.

I'm speechless. I really am. You tied it up so briliantly, with all the bits and pieces that I didn't realise I'd forgotten -
AND I CAN'T BELIEVE I MISSED ALL THOSE CHAPTERS! I kept thinking that I should go back and see if you'd updated, and now I only just got round to it and it's FINISHED! And it's so sad! And it has a happy ending (well, sort of...)! And - !
And now I need to sit and wait for the sequel.
I'm so glad you ended it as you did. I kept thinking, it's going to be a sad ending, but it wasn't! It was terrifically bittersweet and I loved it.
And Gawain... And Gareth... And you nearly made me cry! I never cry at stories!
Now I want to know what all the babies are called - but you'll adress that in the sequel, of course, won't you? Which I can't wait for!

So I shall now stop spouting squeeness and let you know that this lived up to every expectation. You have inspired my to (attempt to) finish my own (long-ongoing) Arthurian retelling, even though I shall have to lower my own standards somewhat, or I shall never get anywhere!

Thank you!

This chapter was really good, too. The tone and narration were perfect. There is one thing, though. In a certain sentence, there was random profanity which, when you look at it closely was a typo. It was the sentence with '...the door slammed hit,' only there was an 's' before the 'hit.'

I'm SO glad that Heart is a trilogy. I can't picture this being one of the last chapters.

Hoping my advice helps,
Vennela

I quite enjoy your writing style. It was a very long chapter but suprisingly easy to read. I think it's because you tell most of the story through dialogue.

One problem that I noticed running through both the narrative and the dialogue was the use of quite modern words. The way Persafal spoke was particularly modern, using colloquial phrases like "nuts".

I liked Jenal. You built her character nicely and I got chills when she arrived to protect the children.

I don't know how it happened but the dialogue at the beginning made me think Guinevere was dead. I was very surprised when she turned up at the coronation.

One technical error I noticed was that use apostrophes in quite a few of your plurals: Saxon's, Horn's, Pendragon's. All of these shouldn't have an apostrophe in them.

- Esther, currently reviewing for the Review Game's Review Marathon (link in my profile)

I liked the premise in the prologue. I quite like Arthurian legends from the perspectives of unexpected characters. I can't remember who wrote it but I enjoyed the movie of the book from Morgan Le Fay's perspective (struggled a bit more with the book).

The scene with Vivian and Merlin seemed like a reasonable starting point. It was a bit bland but I think it was greatly improved by the fact that you used dialogue rather than just writing it, the way a lot of people would have.

- Esther, currently reviewing for the Review Game's Review Marathon (link in my profile)

Wow. Just wow. I can't think of anything else to say as mere language fails to describe how much I enjoyed this retelling of Arthurian legends.

I almost didn't leave a review because I couldn't think of what to write (because this story is just that mind-blowing), but this story deserves at least one review from me, if not a review for every chapter!

I've laughed at/with the characters; I've mourned with/for them; and I've loved watching them grow and change, Mordred especially. In particular, I adore how you've portrayed Mordred.

Overall, I'd have to say that your retelling follows right in the footstep of previous retellings. I can hardly wait for the ending of Heart, if only to be able to read the rest of the trilogy.

Please update soon!

Oh, wow. This has got to be one of your best chapters ever.
So you did do the Lady of Shalott thing, but you turned it into something very different. Congratulations, and well done.

This was a REALLY good one. I can't wait to read the next chapter.

Vennela

I'll be hating you for the next five minutes or so. Don't argue with me about why Gawain had to die. We've hashed this out. That didn't stop me from crying about it.

I like it. A lot.

I'm going to miss Gawain too. I can say nothing more in this sorrow.

V