Bravo, yet again I'm in awe. I love it, I absolutely love it. I honestly suggest sending this in to a magazine, or making a collection of poetry and publishing it. This is so breath-takingly good.

nice. i can almost see the lightning and someone watching it

I agree, but I think the choppy-ness was intended. I even like the rhyming, even though I'm not a big fan of it. Nor am I a big fan of lightning. ^^; Nice work!

I like the way you've written this. It sounds very choppy, but that seems to enhance the subject of the poem, sort of echoing the suddenness of lightning. Lovely. =)