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| Plinky 2005-12-15 ch 1,  | abuseAw, beautifully written. "Chimed in a second one" I love the use of the words chimed. (Odd words jump out at me as working well. It's a strange thing I get.) Lovely emotion. I like how you portray the children as being more perceptive and intelligent than they are assumed to be. Flows beautifully. Really well written. |
| Knightmare Elite 2005-06-07 ch 1, | abuseIt was a nice piece with a more realistic approach to handling the death of a loved one. I do feel bad for the children having to go on like that. Even if they will eventually see through the delucion, it's better than living a life of pain and seperation. |