You have a talent for lyrics. It's actually quite enjoyable to work with some of your songs, especially since making the music up to it is fun. You can change the meaning of every single word, with a simple alteration in voice tone.

This song, however, has a rather clear message. And it's sad. In the sense that you feel hopeless. I really cannot choose a 'favorite line' because it all seems very awkward out of context...suffice to say, then, that I love the whole of it, and what images it creates in my mind. Nice job. Four stars ;)

Wonderfully written, perfectly executed. An almost flawless lyrics, and it would be great as a song.

What can I say? I loved it.

Whisp

"So tuck me inHug me tightAnd give me one more kiss goodnight'Cause sweet dreams aren't in my headWhen I'm dreaming of the dead"

I LOVE IT! i love how your work lately sounds nice but its really about death and murder and is very dark making it extra cool! I love your writing style!

That was so sad! I loved it!

Very nice rhythm and flow.