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| Last.Real Record Store onEa... 2007-07-16 ch 4,  | abuseLoved. It. Sort of a subtle Romeo and Juliet ref at the end, eh? Intentinale, maybe. Still, loved it. Still loving it, really. |
| guardien 2006-12-06 ch 4, | abuseYou're too good for this. Apparently, almost everything you say is poetic, and seemingly every single one of your works deserve praise. How you write it is one question, but what has inspired you so strongly, is one that seems to be answered in your poetry alone. You don't need to express you emotions in any other way... |
| euphemismsforlukewarmtraged... 2005-07-19 ch 2, | abusethis is beautiful. on faves |
| B. M. Reed 2005-06-18 ch 4, | abuseOh I love this so ** much. Amazing job, it's perfect. Going into my favs. |
| marshbar960 2005-06-09 ch 4, | abuseoh well...this is life but God is with you so just hold on. thanks for sharing and keep writing! |
| marshbar960 2005-06-09 ch 3, | abusevery optimistic. i like how you compare the relationship to stats. |
| marshbar960 2005-06-09 ch 2, | abuseyou are beautiful, no matter what the angel of death may throw in your face. keep telling yourself that everytime he tricks you into thinking that. thanks for sharing and keep writing! |
| marshbar960 2005-06-09 ch 1, | abusevery idealistic and imaginative. this reminds me somewhat of peter pan, especially the part of the boy who can fly. thanks for sharing and keep writing! |
| Aslan Israel 2005-06-08 ch 4, | abuseThis is the best one; I think. Very Romeo and Juliet, but somehow deeper. Brava. |
| Aslan Israel 2005-06-08 ch 3, | abuseGives an air of mystery; like glitter covering everything... |
| Aslan Israel 2005-06-08 ch 2, | abuseSimple and short; well done. |
| Aslan Israel 2005-06-08 ch 1, | abuseBeautifully abstract. I love the 3rd stanza. And the last line is just perfect. |
| swaggering curses 2005-06-07 ch 4, | abuseI think that of these four, the first is strongest and the middle two are weakest -- they're simply too short and almost too abstract to speak to the reader, though they obviously make sense to you. The emotion behind them is clear, but the words themselves make no sense. Or perhaps that's just me not being perceptive. I like the last, though, with its Romeo and Juliet references. =) |
| swaggering curses 2005-06-07 ch 1, | abuseYour emotion and adoration of this "boy" shines through clearly. I love the first stanza, where he sings the stars down and makes them into love songs. Very cute. =) |
| gone since winter 2005-06-07 ch 1, | abusebeautiful. the images are just gorgeous and the wording is lovely in a such a simple way. this is just wonderful, keep writing. |