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| ummm im your bro susan its ... 2006-09-13 ch 7,  | aw your poetry is so awsome it relaxed me thanks lifes been pretty hectic with high school and all |
| Artemis Nomad 2006-07-23 ch 3,  | Oh my, thats good. I started reading it and was like "aww, a cute little love poem!" and the last line i just started cracking up. This is great, marvelous. |
| Artemis Nomad 2006-07-23 ch 6, | aw...this is so true, i love the way you set this poem up, the fragments and half sentences, really helps to express the deep emotion in this piece. well done! |
| Artemis Nomad 2006-07-23 ch 1, | very very pretty! i lvoe the rhyming in this poem, and the wishing on stars is very classic, but its not cliched here, which i like |
| fairEtales 2006-06-05 ch 6, | I hate to admit it, but you are correct: the rhyming is really forced. (Example: flay) For most of the poems, though, I really liked the endings. (I walk into the rain/ Letting sadness wash over me) Anyway...My favorite poem was "See this?" That was really cute and original. Nice job. |
| The Fourth Fate 2006-04-07 ch 6, | Aw! I HATE when friends do that. It's like "weren't we friends so you could be there FOR me, not against me" Yeah... Great, great job. This is so sad but really touching and easy to relate to. Bravo. The end is muy triste (very sad). |
| The Fourth Fate 2006-04-07 ch 5, | Aww! Sweet in a cliche kind of way. The rhyming was very cute and if you hadn't mentioned it, I probably wouldn't have found the rhyming to be forced. The forced rhyming does add an effect though- love takes work but the end result is very pleasing. It's like symbolism, you know? Anyway great job. I love it. |
| The Fourth Fate 2005-12-27 ch 4, | Wow. So sweet and romantic. I love the last line. It's so cute. Bravo! |
| The Fourth Fate 2005-12-27 ch 3, | Hahahah! That's so funny! It's like those funny screen T-shirts. Hahahahaha. SO cute. |
| The Fourth Fate 2005-12-27 ch 2, | Aww! So sad! Again, the rhyming worked really well. I'd love to see you write without rhymes, just out of curiosity. Maybe I'll be suprised in the next two chapters? Hee hee. Anyway my favorite line was "But I can't, your laughter echos in my empty heart." Beautiful. |
| The Fourth Fate 2005-12-27 ch 1, | Aww! SO cute. It'd be a cute song, too. The rhyming worked great. Bravo. |
| Aka-Tsuki-Hana 2005-11-26 ch 4, | Oh wow, this somehow reminds me of some kind of legend. Something like the Herder and Weaver story. I don't know what it's exactly called but getting back to the main point! Although what I liked most is that it's short and to the point (unlike me) and plus, it has amazing word usage!! |
| Aka-Tsuki-Hana 2005-11-26 ch 3, | Oh my gosh that was so funny!! I was NOT expecting that but it sure put on an ironic twist that I really liked. Keep it up, free styles are awesome!! |
| Aka-Tsuki-Hana 2005-11-26 ch 2, | I may not be good at interpreting poems but I can definatly tell their is something behind this poem. I don't know what more to say but that it is truly well written and well thought out. And it seemed to have struck something at me that I can't seem to place... |
| Aka-Tsuki-Hana 2005-11-26 ch 1, | OH MY GOSH!! That was so sweet! It was well written and clean. Plus, it did have some rhyme in it that I noticed (I think?) but in general this is very a very well done poem. Keep it up!! |