Reviews for Ambitons on a Friday

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Lady E 2007-04-28 ch 1,	abuseA bit too abrupt of an ending for so marvelously loquacious of a story. Or maybe I'm just praying for fluff after the storm of angst. "You’re my new romance, I think to the phone." - What a heart-breaking line, stark and poignant against the rest of the poetic rambling, and really stopped me for a moment, made me really -think- about what it meant. The stream-of-consciousness was disorienting towards the beginning, but the weary, dejected aura it created works.
Cel M. 2007-03-30 ch 1,	abuseI heart this extremely.
Esquirella 2006-02-16 ch 1,	abuseWOW!
Kitsune Luver 2005-11-11 ch 1, anon.	abuseOmg. I am speechless. Really. Wow. Do you know how amazing this is??!! You are such a great author. This is truly and really beautiful! And I'm not just saying that! Amazing. So good!
mwegan 2005-09-21 ch 1,	abuseWow, well written. Good, consistent mood and atmosphere. A couple sentences are kind of long, and a bit confusing..."A thought on the tube on the way home in the middle of the crowded suits will never lead far." Maybe it's the 'on the, on the, in the, of the' repitition. An interesting technique to evoke the ride on the 'tube' (a subway, right?), but confusing. Or maybe it's just me. A couple more confusing sentences... "...asks whether she's going to right way to somewhere..." did you mean 'going the right way to somewhere'? "...cause no one notices. They’ve not very perceptive..." 'They're not...'?
Skeptic_Critic 2005-09-16 ch 1, anon.	abusethat was one of the most amazing and well written one shot's i've ever read and i've read quite a few. keep it up...this is good...
Porn Yesterday 2005-09-16 ch 1,	abuseAmazing piece of work. Intricately pieced together in a flow of thoughts that manifests into something beautiful. [Due to sleepiness with it being 2 AM, review shall be continued at a later date. Hopefully tomorrow]
leylakedi 2005-08-31 ch 1,	abusewow, you have a great style of writing! it's like a stream of thought, but well organized. My favorite line is: "“Hi,” I whisper, reaching out the pull the phone on my ear and holding it like it’s the earth." really awesome stuff. -L-
Made in U.S.A. 2005-08-21 ch 1,	abuseagain i love your style. i love the details you use and everything about the story. sorry i didn't review this the first time i read it.keep writing :D
Manda 2005-07-05 ch 1, anon.	abuse...That made me want to cry. Really intense. Gorgeous.
Joewhatever 2005-06-18 ch 1,	abuseO.O wow. that was beautiful. so..nice. :) very well written-- i really got into it, the tone the imagery... everything. i just got dragged in. great write.
kalmia raphael 2005-06-15 ch 1,	abusei freaking LOVE this. it's just so real and non-cliche and atypical. you use such normal things to talk about his pain (going to work and coming back, weekend, TV... ) but i really feel for him. its like... in a breakup it's the tiny things that matter, yeah? i loved the whole thing with the phone, how he kept sleeping with it etc.. and the way they seemed to understand what the true meanings behind e.o.'s words were when they spoke on phone finally. yey for happy ending! i would have been so depressed if it wasn't...
TwystedFate 2005-06-13 ch 1,	abuseI really like it. You just get better and better.
Hilary 2005-06-13 ch 1, anon.	abuseAW.:3 I love'I trot the steps and I'm tired at the top.' It's so pretty.I have nothing constructive to say.But I read it; be proud of me!I enjoyed it, too :O
Saeger 2005-06-12 ch 1,	abuseThat's sad till the end, when it's cute. Overexcessive cursing, but in the frame of mind the person's in, I have to agree with every word. Nice job.

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