aw that really sucks that their parents rejected them. but this is a great story keep up the great work. pls update

YAY! Its a really, really good story.

wow impy its a great story! lol where do u get these ideas? i confused! lol~tenny zinny

Okay, this review is probably going to be on the long side, with lots of good critiques and some comments for improvement. First of all, you're going to have to work extra hard to make your story stand out from the rest, because the same general plot has been done numerous times in books, movies, and even on TV (remember Dark Angel?). No offense, but so far it's starting off just like all of those other plots. Next, if the govt. actually did this, they wouldn't just send the kids home because they'd probably want to keep this secret. If the kids are sent home, there's too much risk for people going to the media. If you want to keep with the girls' parents rejecting them you might say something like the girls had escaped and gone home but their parents just returned them to the govt. Finally, I really do like your story. Otherwise I wouldn't have bothered leaving a review. I love the flashbacks between present and past. Keep writing and update soon!