For all who are reading this, I am Alex's friend Angel. I am the blonde and blubbering one in all the pen stories. I ROCK! I'm not just saying this either. Ask Alex on a review herself. Anyways, I love this story. I was one ofthe first to read it at our school. Its funny. love u alex!luv Angel (cough cough)

Great you made the bunnies soud like a group of crazy people...Nice job! Anyway, the idea of the crazy lunch ladies is hillarious! I hope Mr. Rogers(THE KFC MAN) never reads this. If he does well he won't know it's you. Anyway get the third chapter up already!

Miasmas

WHy does this seem so familiar... Oh yeah I was one of the people who was trying to read the story. Great play thing...

Miasmas

Craziness. I must say. Some nice sarcastic randomness. Just adjust the formatting so the dialogue reads better.

I'll try to work with your suggestions, but am just too darn lazy to right now... {-}

Ah, well, so, thanks!

Hmm, very interesting, hehe. I liked it but the format wasn't exactly a play. If you rearranged some of the spacing, etc. it could flow a little better. Other than that, good job. Can't wait to see scene two.

I like your premise and plot, but you should separate the different lines of dialog so that it is easier to read. A list of characters at the beginning would be wonderful too.