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| no.peace.los.angeles 2006-03-04 ch 1,  | abuseFavorite line: "You frankly prefer the anonymous/self-gratified bougainvillea splashes." A very nice image, and an interesting way of thinking about flowers. Keep writing! :) |
| Sunami Silverblade 2005-06-18 ch 1, | abuseA very interesting poem--lovely imagery. Everything was crystal clear, and I liked the way you described several things. For example, the rain dribbled down like porridge. At least for me, that was a new and unique way of describing the rainfall, and I found that very amusing. ^_^ Good job, this sounded archaic, in a way, yet tinged with new-age... a wonderful combination. Keep up the nice work! --Sunami Silverblade |
| mizu no kokoro 2005-06-14 ch 1, | abusewow, you reli did the research and the sight of setting in account to this poem~~ Great work!! |
| peaceman4ever 2005-06-13 ch 1, | abuseso cool...descriptions are soo vivid... |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2005-06-13 ch 1, | abuseI like how you are taking real situations and writing about them. It gives such credibility and strength to your writing, thick with culture and sensory details. Love it! |
| Sorrowful Dreams 2005-06-13 ch 1, | abusethis is pretty good. I love the descriptions. ~Sorrow~ |
| randomunknown 2005-06-13 ch 1, | abuseI don't quite understand this, but as I have nerver left europe, that is hardly your fault. I like the way you took each aspect of the extract, and twisted them with your own modern idea of how they fit into singapore. Something I intend on reading again and hope it becomes clearer. |
| Lucid Nonsense 2005-06-13 ch 1, | abuseVery well done, you really capture the essence of another culture. |
| Wainwright 2005-06-13 ch 1, | abuseI like this alot (and this isn't false praise- I don't lie in my reveiws) The only false note I felt was "All is white, the colour of purity,", because that was too cliched for my liking. But then I did like the "(in nature never found uncorrupted)". So I suppose they even out. Normally I wouldn't be too keen ont he image of the "Of this rainfall that dribbles, like porridge/ From the corner of the willful sky-child’s tongue". But it worked in the tone of the poem. And was a strange, memorable image. Good work. |