hi keith i think out of all of your poetry that i have read this is one of my favourites. At the moment i am doing the secretarial course and i want to write my essay that is needed on poetry snd was wondering if you could give me an interview please respond you know my number

wow, a lot darker than your normal stuff, i love it. You have tapped into a deeper self. :)

Quite lovely, Keith, as usual. I suppose there are several ways of looking at this poem. On one level it's about how an alcoholic will fanatise and use alcohol as a substitute for a meanlingful and moral life. On another level, I suppose it's about how people have a tendency to ignore the truth of life, the universe, and everything (;)) and cling to useless fantasy. Top job, buddy.

This seems like a soul searching piece, and one where people are disillusioned. Beautiful.

I have to give you props for the ending. The words in this really sound good together, they have a certain way they weave together to make soemthing more complex.

ANNA

You sleep the sleep of dreamers,Of what may, but, will never be.

Love your end too. Just beautiful.

Hey Keith, This sounds good. I still don't know what I'm getting from it yet. I have to keep thinking about it. Acholic finding life in a paradise, actually an illsuioned alleyway where they passed out. Happiness only comes when drinking...I'm still thinking about it but that's my intial impression. I do like the flow of it though.

Excellent introduction, metaphors here are extravagant and what more can I say?-ADD

Wow, that really different from any other Hopless Romantic poem I've heard! Its very creative and ingenious (sp?)! You can see the alley & the "lady" very clearly.

Finally!! =D =D I love the last stanza, and the whole poem is very true.. And every time i read it it gets better, and you just wait til im a bit more awake, coz im sure ill enjoy it even more then :P well done, i love it! =D

love ya!

It was vivid and vibrant. And while it was fast paced and evocative, I found it was overly melodramatic which ruined it slightly for me.

It was distinctive though (a nice change from adolescent moaning).

There were lots of lines I liked, "unstable silence" stood out for me because it was so precise. Although you're better than a line like "Darkness descends"- that was just lazy.

Good poem (or else I wouldn't be giving it criticism). I look foward to reading more of your work (in fact am off to investigate your profile).

tramps - dont you love 'em? i like this, its really different to most things iv seen on fp. nicely done,

Han.