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| Kuradok Evangeline 2007-12-18 ch 1,  | abuseNice choice of diction, and a nice ending - its very different - not predictable. Quirky and interesting. K, Evangeline |
| lackluster 2005-07-02 ch 1, | abuseweird, honest, and beautiful. great work!! ~tuesday |
| Osunale 2005-06-24 ch 1, | abuseI like this, strange and sweet, there's a certain touch to it that I find myself enjoying very much. |
| B. M. Reed 2005-06-18 ch 1, | abuseHahaha I like the last two lines. This poem is pretty, I liked your descriptions. Keep writing~! |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2005-06-18 ch 1, | abuseWhat powerful choice of diction! Very good |
| AboveTheSalt 2005-06-17 ch 1, | abusehm. Seems very basic. Not sure if i like it all too much, although I'm certain the simplicity was no mistake. Just not my cup of tea, though it definitely fits the feeling - coarse, tipsy, and blatantly honest. Nice piece for the sentiment. -salt. |
| simpleplan13 2005-06-15 ch 1, | abusethats a relaly odd sotry, but awesomely written |
| kalmia raphael 2005-06-15 ch 1, | abuseloved it. it seems so straightforward and honest... slightly sad in some parts. bits of rhyming some places sounds really nice... seeing red is an interesting concept.. because people usually see red when they're mad... anyway... i like the terms of endearments used in it too... overall.. yeah, loved it = P |
| floppybelly 2005-06-14 ch 1, | abuseAs promised, I'm reading your stuff now. Interesting that the narrator prefers one type of alcohol over another, when they all have the same effect. I'm probably just being stupid again, but why do you mention the light stench on the collar? How can a person inhabit it? And wouldn't it be viewed as a bad thing? Is that the entire point? Why would the narrator bruise her neck? What is red? Why are they drunk? What does it matter? Will I ever stop the flood of questions? Does anyone even care? Aww, poo... I'll just go away now. |
| Saeger 2005-06-14 ch 1, | abuseOh, that's neat. Not many people like to think of a scene like that... I can see someone having those thoughts trying to get drunk to gewt rid of them. Some of my friends (a lot of them...) are gay, adn one actually just recently admitted it to himself after a time like this. Great job! |
| Karmachanic 2005-06-13 ch 1, | abuseDude, that was frickin' awesome. No other words that can justify this peice really, it was certainly very original and unique (loved the touch of humor) and the ending was MARVELOUS! |
| poetic abortion 2005-06-13 ch 1, | abusebeautiful work once again. I found myself entranced by the breathtaking awe this seemed to project. lovely work! !~* noelle *~! |
| midsea 2005-06-13 ch 1, | abuseAwesome. Well written and original. I like it. |