 Alankria 2006-05-08 . chapter 1Though I'd check this out, as the summary sounds interesting...
Oh England.
Nice little twist there, with who they killed. Did the Normans not realise they had failed to kill the child?
Nice ending! I don't have any CC for this piece. I like how the events of the first part have such an effect on the second part. If only all wars could be averted so smoothly.
In response to your reviews: (1) Concerning the hooded man who spoke to Fox... go with your initial instinct :) (2) Yes, James is one of Nakem's Generals. It's all explained in due time. (3) Why does Chen just stand there and talk to her? Well, the house isn't particularly near anywhere else; also, the locals don't speak much Carreneid. Also, it's not like Chen has much to lose by having people know he wants Fox dead; Fox already knows this. I might try to slip in some of those points, especially the first two. (4) More detail on Casey's past comes soon, in the chapter I posted last night. |
 Islandbreeze 2006-04-28 . chapter 1This was a lovely short piece- the language you used fit very well, and the descriptions were marvelous. I definitely wasn't thinking of the nurse, but it made perfect sense. Nice ending, and great job. |