it sounds so very real. beautifully written, espcially the final chapter.


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One word: lovely. More Words: I really appreciate the distinction between love and the possibility of it.

This sort of work reminds me of modern day movies. There are two types of movies, the first filled with mindless action scenes, explosions and corny recycled one liners without any real depth or further interpretation the second type of movie requires acting. The latter doesn't need a single gunshot, fight scene or explosion to enhance the storyline. It is actual acting, emotional connection, plot development. Your story is something that develops very well and most importantly makes you concerned for the characters. The key to good writing is the ability to genuinely want something to happen in the story, and in this instance it's wanting to see Danny and Joie swallow their pride and embrace what they feel. It is interesting to find decent dialogue in modern day writing.

aww.. that's cute:))

Once again, fantastic. I don't know what to say anymore! There is nothing wrong in your stories, not even a typo!

I like a lot. It feels a tad cliche... but I don't think I know my way around the typical cliches well enough to consider them cliches, so I'll leave this as: a nice story that sums up the situation of the ideal persistent man going after the insecure girl.

But honestly, a line on peanut butter? Haha I'd like to read something else of yours that brings up "What's real and what's not," that'd be interesting.

Aw so sweet!

xx

Interesting, realistic, and very cute. now i want a Danny of my own. He's so adorable. Damn now i'm depressed cuz my current BF is a schmuck.

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p.s. said schmuck has a nice car. no i'm not a golddigger, altho i might pull a Carrie Underwood/Jazmine Sullivan and smash said car.

oh i think it was beautiful.:) short and sweet.:)

aww
this is so cute

it's true the button was irresistable, that story was amazing, beautiful!
that last part where Danny walks over to Joie was a little rushed I think, but really wow! it is a beautiful story!

I loved how Joeie slowly began to realise her feelings for Danny, and this last chapter was especially cute.

It's so... beautiful.

:)

whoa...

that was... i dont even know what to say

kind of amazing and kind of confusing

but nontheless, it was good, really, enough for me to review

if you havnt read it, read it!

Hey new reader I like you story its short and sweet :D but not too sweet if you know what I mean. I was really refreshing reading this after doing an hour of calculus hw that I'm still not done with haha. Anyways enjoyed you story please write more ! :]

The way Danny came up to her was sorta sudden, but the story was amazing.
I love the way you describe things, and I love the last lines. It was beautiful, just like the title :)
Amazing job/