Oh, I sure hope that Brian is gay. They're so cute!

I literally snorted at the last line. xD

Oh geez. That just killed me. Nathan is hilarious. Actually, he’s neat. Really, really neat. I couldn't stop laughing... throughout the whole story. Good job.

Oh my god. I love this. It was hilarious and I just love Math's character and the fact that it's his name but he still sucks at it. And hes gay. D Yay.

Ha. This is great. I like your style, whatever it is. I'm not really sure what it is but it is you and isn't anywhere else on fiction press. I love it

i love cute gay guys.

nathan's character is too cute. i love it. mitch is awesome. jared seems cool too.

Actually everyone is.

I love how you call that little girl a lesbian practically.

“You know your dolls are going to burn in the fiery pits of hell, right?” .god.

"God, I can’t even threaten violence without making it queer." Teehee.

I had a girl who stared directly in my eyes the entire time she talked to me. I thought she was hitting on me and I didn't want to be mean so I tried avoiding her the rest of my life. Turns out she was staring at the weird gray slotches on the whites of my eyes.

She's really observive.

I loved your story - even on the third or fourth reread, I can't stop laughing. In fact, this story even inspired me to write my own story (which is completely different from yours, except that it involves math). I hope you don't mind.

aw, okay, I love this Lol, it's halarious, but oh so cuteXD Good job

Great story! I love the casual feel of it, and your descriptions made me laugh.

I love this story! It's much better than most one-shots. I wouldn't call it a one-shot, more like a short story. Perfect as it is.

ok, i read this ages ago and reviewed then, but i just read it again, and i ADORE this story! you probably think i'm really wierd now, but i really love it, and i think you shoudl be really proud of it! )

JB

You are my new hero. Seriously. This story was a) awesome, and b) ... well, I think awesome pretty much covers it. But you know... things sound better if there's an a) AND b). Anyway... ;

So like I was saying: I love everything about this, and the humour! I'm a big fan of it. P Plus, you actually write humour really well, which is refreshing (not that there's a lot of people who don't (neccessarily), but whatever). I would point out all the examples of humour that was especially effective, except that a) then I would be re-posting the entire thing and b) people really hate it when I do that. As much fun as *I* have, it's not a particularly constructive review. (But see what I mean about a) and b) sounding much better than just saying one thing! P)

And, I give you kudos on writing a kind of long short story... And one that actually has a plot! Not only do my short stories barely go past one character (ever) but I have issues with plot, so give yourself a pat on the back for managing to weave together a whole bunch of characters and telling a story. Which doesn't *sound* like a compliment (in fact, say it with a sarcastic voice and it's an insult) but it really is. Honestly. ;

Anyway, where I'm trying to get with all this sounds-like-insulting complimenting and rambling, is that this rocks. I would even give you a high five, except or the whole "internet" thing.

So in short (maybe I should have done this originally): 1. Humour equals good. 2. Many characters equals good. 3. Giving the story a plot equals good.

AND the fact that the characters and the plot were awesome helped as well. I liked it all. )

hey, this was a fun read. the narrator has a great sense of humor and the way the story was written was pretty much flawless in tone and pacing. also, it was a pretty unique idea.

i really liked this piece. i think you work well with first person pov.

i am in love. with your writing style. seriously, i haven't read anything as good as this for ages. this is excellent (and sad, because i am currently inlove with a gay guy and its breakign ym heart )) but awesome nonetheless. you rock

Kya! I love Nathan, he has this bluntness that kills me. I like that way it's played out, simple but meaningful at the sametime. Like, how he doesn't make a big deal out of the fact that he's gay. Cool beans. -