very pretty and sweet, i enjoyed it, nicely done

*squeals* i've left u so many off line messages and i've sent u a couple of reviews and u were just gone and i was sad and now ur back so i'm happy anyway we should talk some time lots to tell you talk to you soon i hope *Mandi*

bah. i just tried to review and then subsequently killed it (accident, of course.) Try #2.

This piece made me smile. Very pretty image you've made. I think the title, though, is a bit on the rash and passionate side for your slightly softer poem. Also, "shamless" on line four should probably be "shameless", but I'm not sure if that was intentional. Very touching (& refreshing!) that you have such a deep relationship with your girlfriend. Best of luck to the both of you & keep up the pretty work.

-salt.

the words flow really well...you might want to change the formatting and the spacing of the lines though, i feel claustrophobic when i look at them... :P

truly yours...

short and awesome... great poem.. the words are amazing

beautiful!

SP