hide away was really good too. just how it shows some truth. how people will build layers or walls to hide themselves and their pain, but still hurt. though i love the rhyme sceme.

still has a nice "flow"

The flow of this piece as a whole is lovely and consistent. A fantastic read.

the way this poem rolls on very strong and determined is great...i love the flow and the rhyme...i love it. lots of love AllyCred

interestingly written, nice rhyme meter P

Oh... I'm in awe. I absolutly adore this one. How do you do it? This is definatly one of your best. It's just so... complete, all the way through. Especially liking how you somehow rhymed the whole thing. Like this aBcBdBeBfB (you get it) pattern going on. It's great. I'm loving it. Please, keep writing, you are amazing. These things I have though and felt but could never even hope to put them into words like you have. Someone needs to get out there the pain that we're going through each and every day. Someone needs to let them know our constant struggle, our story...

Wow. Very nicely written poem!

Wow. I like it. It builds up so much. Nicely done.