Dude, I loved it. and, I wish I'd heard of you earlier, as is... Before June 16? So I coulda read this on June 16. Because that's my birthday, and it would be like... a birthday present, only not really.

okay, the point is, I really liked it.

I like it a lot.

It's a nice story. Very sad, but I it's nice to know that there's no certain end. I also like the change of POV. After I understood how it worked, I liked it a lot. I would love seeing more with these characters, but not as a new chapter, but maybe a story about them.

Actually, I like this. o.o It's not awful. It's good. And for being a short one-shot thing, it's got a good plot and deeper meaning. You could turn it into a story and it would be awesome. ^.^

heh, not bad, once i got into the whole rhythm of it. not too shabby at all!

Not awful, just a bit foggy. I think it confuses a bit, but is rather appealing in the way it does that. ^_^

PSLPB: Incest is wrong, children. I-*tasered*DW: Ah shut up old man. Let the boys have their fun. *contnues to taser while laughing madly*

NNA: A bit short.. and the whole twincest thing reminds me *uncomfortably* of a certain someone we both know, but otherwise good job.