I like the sincerity in this poem. I think you made it in all lowercase to add to the feel, but it made it grammatically incorrect.

well, i'm bakc on fictionpress! i just posted my first two chapters of book from beach. yay! well i'm excited for when you get back.. and oh yeah, about the poem.. i love the diet coke reference.. like a lot.. very smart thinking my darling big mac. "in a black dress that hugged my body" *wink wink* got that little black dress you were talkin' 'bout.. hahahaha.. D

i crave beautyiful friendship & love,... beautiful

well done.. i lvoe the foprmat although i might separate it into stanzas

hey, this little series is pretty good! I didn't quite care for the last one (bit too cliched, maybe). But I love the diet coke one. So fabulous!

Love the last two the best. It would be wonderful if you make these into something more, but they're great now, too.