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| Curtis Layne 2005-07-01 ch 4,  | abuseThis is very gripping, and very well written. I want to hear more. |
| bluedrop 2005-06-20 ch 3, | abusewhoa...powerful are you distubed in some way? be careful wat you think you just might do it |
| darkofnight 2005-06-19 ch 1, | abuseOkay. I've figured out the chapter management. For those of you who wanted more to this story it is now located under Shadows of the Mind. |
| Alexia Krycek 2005-06-17 ch 1, | abuseThat monologue kept me riveted until the end. There was a perfect balance of anger and '**'s. |
| Freakeh 2005-06-17 ch 1, | abuseIt's quite a true depiction of society and it has happened before: push a man too far, and eventually he starts pushing back. It's a very raw anger kinda story, so I agree that I don't know why it belongs in Horror but I don't really care as I like the story. Yes I think the "**"s were necessary to show anger. Like I said I like the story; very good. It doesn't explain a lot of things but it doesn't need to, in this case. Well done. |
| Closed for remodeling 2005-06-17 ch 1, | abuseI beleive it. I can understnad someone feeling that way if that happend to them. Hell, thats the way I'd feel...Oh and yeah, to many "**". Not that I have anthing against the word. It's a little over used. |
| whyette-h 2005-06-17 ch 1, | abuseI don't believe it. I don't find it plausible. This isn't an anger that I'd expect. It definately isn't all that scary or creepy or anything... I'm not sure why it's in the horror section... I would say cut down on the "**"'s. It was overused a little bit, especially there at the end. There are other ways to display anger... -Whyette |