HaHa, this reminds me of something called copyright... ne? anyhow, great plot... i can see where this is going... to the new era of story writing hahaha... kk the format, still i like the older versions better, the ones that was erased...*pouts* so so... everything is in place and countdown, i'll be waiting for the next chapie, ne? Good luck n all the best!(i'm encouraging u to write, so write!*glowing green eyes*)

It's not exactly what I call an interesting start, but it's ok for an introduction. The descriptions were good. Update and make the chapter longer with more dialogue. Nice job...

m I can't say anything yet, but the formatting is very, odd, to say the least. Wyould you mind explaining the need to have a - after the end of every parageraph? Is there and extrodinary amount of time passing? Is the point of view changing?

i like the way that this is going... please continue and update soon^_^