Wow, the story has progressed nicely since I last read it--what, a century ago??

Syrac is a very interesting character...you have made her different from other female characters in the more standard tales. Your characterization is much appreciated.

Also, I think the customs of your people are very well-thought-out. You have made a whole new world, like, totally, with new customs and everything. Kudos to you for that.

But what about description? You need more details that describe the temperature, colors, clothing, anything, to make the setting and mood more realistic. Putting more emotion in your dialogue would be good too.

About your dialogue--

"Fine." Syrac growled.

That first period should not be there; it is not proper writing etiquette.

"Fine," Syrac growled.

That comma placed within the quotations represents that Syrac is actually growling the word 'fine'. Just a suggestion.

Very good plot...it will be interesting to see how the relationship between Tarvis and Syrac unfolds.

Can't wait for an update!

Interesting idea forming. I see that you thinkk that elves are scum. I won't take it as a personal insult, but still...

Wow. Really entertaining! Very enjoyable story, it managed to suck me right in.I like how you flipped the sterotype with the elves being comletely out of place in the wilderness while the humans (I assume that they're humans, I don't think you actually said it outright) are right at home in the forest.The relationshhip between Syrac and Tarvis is wonderful. All of her hostility really cracked me up, especially as it didn't even phase Tarvis.The world you're creating is very interesting, especially since the Selvan culture is so at odds with our own modern one. Subservient men (at least when courting), and nudity being such a non-issue add a lot of color, especially in contrast to the elven viewpoint, which is more akin to our own.The only thing I really wasn't quite clear on was just how civilized the Selvans were. Much of the description lead me to believe they were more primitive or barbaric (wearing teeth and furs, eating raw meat(Tarvis' rabbit snack), and again, their disregard for nudity and the willingness and ability to fight). Even though, you described Syrac putting on leather trousers and a loose blouse. Do many people wear clothing like this, or is it more for warriors, or is it just a kind of mix and match between furs and manufactured clothing?All in all, an awesome start on what looks to be a great story. I hope to read more.Keep up the good work!

And I have finally read the last chapter here. I have been busy with reading someone's story that is 118 chapters and the Harry Potter book, but here I am.

I bet Syrac just loves having to bring Matha with her . . . and I bet so does Tarvis. It is hard to flirt in front of the little one, and poor Namuk. He's bringing home three of these folks. I bet the other elves are going to love that.

Hey! I told you I have been reading a very long story. Besides, I didn't have a copy of Chapter 1 printed up. Anyway, I am dropping you a line ;)

I don't think your characters are flat. Tarvis and Syrac are rather funny, and poor little Jared. Well, I guess he's not the pants in the family.

I think the goblins need to overrun the elves. They do deserve it.

Namuk seems to be the only elf with any sense.

Yeah, elves are rather ridiculous, aren't they! I love Sianna's parting line in this chapter, especially with everyone up in arms.

The courtship thing is fun. And Jared really needs to get himself a new knife. Is Matha an albino, or is she just pale with white hair? Just curious.

Feh. Stupid fictionpress. I have you on my author alert...but the stupid website won't send me alerts anymore...so I'm sorry if you've had this up for awhile and I haven't reviewed it.

Anyway, I love where this is going. You seem to completely know where you're going. Syrac is so awesome - she's strong, resourceful, and intelligent.

Try adding a bit more description (although you're doing a wonderful job as it is) and be careful about making it fast-paced. Many authors lose reviewers by rushing into the main idea.

All in all, though, good story! It's so intriguing...I look forward to your next installment!

Wow..Why she ask them to stay for dinner? Is she going to eat them...Keep going with this please.

Wow. This is interesting. You should keep going with this. Also I mostly updated my stories if you care to read. Keep writing this one.

Hey - I like this story, especially the culture of these tribes. Good job, keep up the good work!