I love your rhyme scheme, and the repetiveness doesn't annoy me at all. Usually, in other poems, it really bugs me, but this one fit very will. The tension is palpable, and you did a very good job.

-Helen

Oh...my...god! this is just so incredible! u hav an awesome talent here. i love the lines in bold and the rhyming is fantastic. goin on my favs! plus i was just reading ur bio and i'm from UK too!

Another really amazing song. I'm running out of compliments, lol. You're too good. i seriously consider you the best songwriter I review. But dont tell any of the others that.

ANNA

inspiring! I especially liked "It's like I'll be fighting foreverJust to keep it all together(Freeze, breathe, freeze, breathe)"...it's really me in a nutshel...keep it up...and so sorry for not reviewing!-pammy-

Very powerful chorus, nice work.

so great, i really loved it. awesome song. very powerful.

I UBER APOLOGIZE FOR THE LACKING! -; but me is back and all is well! I luff this especially how it's written. "(Freeze, breathe, freeze, breathe)" then normal text then bold text for chorus. great job! -

I liked that, especially the (freeze, breathe) parts. Good job.

This is awesme, great work!

I love the chorus and the repition of the first line.. awesome song

My throat constricts after reading this poem, powerful!

tunnel eh... very nice :D *smiles at evil ideas that arise* awesone!

just as heart rendering as phobia, I adore this triligy. wonderful, wonderful song. _ love it.

* noelle

this is really good. I love the chorus and the flow! very touching. Great work!

Sorrow